2019-05-23 15:28 供稿單位: 新航道
“Some people think that older children should be required to take care of younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults.Which of the two points of view do you agree with?”
※ 位置（寫在哪里）：經典的位置在道理后面，“大膽 / 自由”的位置在全文的最開頭。
【用例子作為整篇作文的開頭，確實是一種“大膽”的寫法】 I did not the chance to take care of any younger siblings, since I am the only child of my parents. My parents had the chance, looking after my uncles and aunts, since their parents were busy working people andabsent most of the time. Those children have all grown up fine, and my parents in particular have become caring and responsible adults. 【用總結例子的方式引出立場】 What happens in my family illustrates my point that older children should take care of younger children, and I do not think that it is parents or other adults who should do the job.
1、the younger children are benefited；
2、the older children are benefited；
3、the family as a whole is benefited。
【首先，“水”一句，提示讀者我們開始討論第一個方面。】 First, the younger children are benefited. 【然后，正常展開經典的行文結構：先一句、兩句、三句講道理。】 They grow up better when they are attended by the brothers or sisters than when they are raised by the parents. The advantage lies within the narrow age range, and the similar ages do not divide the children. By contrast, the generation gap between a parent and a child is disadvantageous. 【講道理的時候，不要貪圖妄想一句中心句就一定可以把道理說明白。】【接下來，道理講完，舉例子去詮釋道理。】 In the case of my uncles and aunts, because they were taken care of by their older siblings, my parents, who are not much older, they were well understood. For instance, when they made mistakes, my parents would not scold them, and instead they were educated gently, and the mistakes might have beentolerated. They now recall the plenty of joy and little stress during their happy childhood. If they had been looked after by my grandparents, their children would not have been joyful and would have been stressful. 【最后一句是用虛擬語做比較，比較于家長照顧小孩兒】
【先提示讀者我們開始討論第二個方面。】 The older children are also benefited. 【講道理從這里開始】The experience of looking after the younger children may be transferred. When the older children grow up to be adults, they will, using the experience, be able to take good care of their own children. The experiencequalifies them for being parents. Also, they may grow a caring heart, which is a desirable quality when they are with other people. 【不是每一個idea都要舉例。當一個道路特別顯而易見的時候，可以考慮不要例子。】In comparison, when the job is done by the parents, the older children miss the chance to learn and to develop the sense of responsibility. 【最后一句是做比較，比較于家長照顧小孩兒】
In addition, the family as a whole is benefited. 【講道理從這里開始】In many families, where older children act the parents’ role, looking after their younger brothers or sisters, children are closely bonded. Conflict is less likely in such families when the children become adults. The intimacy prevents the scramble for the properties descending from the older generation. 【道理最多三句講完，然后舉例】 For instance, a family may fall apart when an older person leaves the world as the heritage may be the point of struggle. However, this would not be the case in families where the older and younger offspring / descendants have thefirm bond. 【例子的篇幅不一定要很大】
In light of the above, it is advisable that older children take care of younger children. It is better than parents doing the job.